Tylakya, thanks for sharing this. I'm just starting to write, and I have so many things I want to do. I'm working on a novel and some animated series, but I have a hard time getting all this stuff together since I have school, so I mainly just write little stuff. Maybe I'll start sharing my stuff on here since I love sharing my ideas and getting some important feedback from people, telling me what I'm doing right and what people want to see more of. As for your story, it's solid as rock but it still has its blemishes, also known as grammar mistakes and confusing wording. Instead of God, I would try deity since I didn't get an implication that the Livathosi are Christians, Muslims, or Jews. Also, you have a run-on sentence when you were talking about never finding a poor Livathosi. But trust me, I make the same mistakes all the time.