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Seeing a large crystal castle out in the distance,
higher than any skyscraper I've seen in the real world.
Getting closer each step, I jumped over the large fence,*whoosh*
seeing animals force to work on farms, the cubs being bored.
A panda general came up to me with his human ride, in my mind i refused,
"What are you doing here in my king's land!", he says in a low tone.
"I think i've been brought from another world.", I say, confused,
"You're the one to save us all!", he says, he then calls the king on the phone.*ring..ring..ring*
"He's here, the one who will save us all!", he says with glee,
"Who are you?", I said, still having a confused face.
"I'm sorry but I think I'm not the one you want.", I say,
"Come let me show you something.", he says, pulling out a key.*clang,clang,clang*
Bringing me to a hole in the ground,
we both jump in,*thump*,looking at ancient drawings on the wall.
A bits of rocks from the ceiling continue to crumble and fall,
telling me the story, while the rocks hit the ground, creating small sound.*crackle*
I started to get the concept of why I was here in thus place,
questions spiral in my head with confusion.
"Can you save us all?", he says with exhilaration,
"Yes ill help only if I can go back to my world.", I say walking back on the trace.
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higher than any skyscraper I've seen in the real world.
Getting closer each step, I jumped over the large fence,*whoosh*
seeing animals force to work on farms, the cubs being bored.
A panda general came up to me with his human ride, in my mind i refused,
"What are you doing here in my king's land!", he says in a low tone.
"I think i've been brought from another world.", I say, confused,
"You're the one to save us all!", he says, he then calls the king on the phone.*ring..ring..ring*
"He's here, the one who will save us all!", he says with glee,
"Who are you?", I said, still having a confused face.
"I'm sorry but I think I'm not the one you want.", I say,
"Come let me show you something.", he says, pulling out a key.*clang,clang,clang*
Bringing me to a hole in the ground,
we both jump in,*thump*,looking at ancient drawings on the wall.
A bits of rocks from the ceiling continue to crumble and fall,
telling me the story, while the rocks hit the ground, creating small sound.*crackle*
I started to get the concept of why I was here in thus place,
questions spiral in my head with confusion.
"Can you save us all?", he says with exhilaration,
"Yes ill help only if I can go back to my world.", I say walking back on the trace.
should i do onamonapias (sound effects) more often? put a comment below, let me know what you think.
VOTE HERE FOR THE POEM YOU WANT TO SEE ME WRITE
OR SUGGEST A POEM TO ME BY MESSENGING ME ^_^ I WILL READ IT
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Update #1 : by SpowzyThePoet 08/19/2015 11:37:55 pmAug 19th, 2015
i just dont think ill make an ending good enough so ill be ending it for now ;3; i guess it did seem like it ended cause its been a while since i made this one
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PMC is awesome. Constructive criticism is wonderful too <3 And I really enjoyed your poem!