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Hades2004pi's Avatar Hades2004pi
Level 6 : Apprentice Mage
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This is deleted it was so bad.>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
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12/23/2014 2:27 pm
Level 14 : Journeyman Goblin
-TheGrimCreeper-
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It starts out third person, then goes into first person. Badly written, spelling mistakes, bad grammar, unfinished ending...

Eeehh.. Work on your stuff, m8.
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12/23/2014 4:55 pm
Level 6 : Apprentice Mage
Hades2004pi
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Sorry, I was in a rush so it was bad but i fixed it!
Thanks Anyway!
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12/23/2014 4:58 pm
Level 14 : Journeyman Goblin
-TheGrimCreeper-
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I mean... It's a bit better now. Not exactly Tolkien, but a bit better.
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12/23/2014 2:06 pm
Level 1 : New Miner
Apexerino
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Santa isn't real :)
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