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Elementdragon0
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My eyes opened and then I looked up and screamed in horror. I stood up and instantly a billion questions popped in my head, but all that I could get out was, “where am I?”

I walked around a bit, but all I could infer was that I was in a deep, dark, oak wood forest. There was not much I could do, the black of the frigid night was creeping in. It was so dark that- I couldn't even see my hand in front of my face. I sat down and began to wonder “what should I do?”. I began to think, “ this must be a dream”, but I knew that sitting around thinking wouldn't help so I did what I do best. I didn't know if it would work, now that I'm In this world...instead of seeing this world on a screen in the comfort of my home. As I began to punch the wood with my hands, I grew tired and sore; after a little while I had amassed some wood logs. As the sun was setting and the sky darkened, I started to make a shelter, well that was until, until I was about halfway done and I heard a faint noise behind me. I quickly turned around, but to my surprise there was nothing there...just the rustling of leaves and the soft gowl of the wind… I briskly returned to my makeshift shelter, placing each log after another, I didn't want to be outside, unsafe, and unprotected, at night, especially with the mobs that just began to spawn. Once I finished my job, I quickly created a crude bed and fell into a less than peaceful sleep.

I was awoken by the sound of the thunder clashing, accompanied by what seemed to be... a scream? I've only gotten what seems like an hour or two of sleep when I was awoken. Shocked, I stood up and was about to go look around for the source of the scream until another blazing flash of light, accompanied by a ear piercing bang landed to the left of my shelter. With the flash of light from the thunder, I saw what I swear I thought was a silhouette with pure white eyes, glowing eyes, looking back at me looking at me. I said," Hello, Is anyone there?" But no one answered me, the only reply I received was an inconveniently placed bolt of lightning, which came down at full force from the sky right in front of me. I was knocked unconscious and when I came to, I ran like hell. I saw that there was minimal damage, but I'd have to replace a few logs that were set on fire.

With the faint glow of the crackling fire, I could see the shadow of an old broken down house in the distance. It looked decrepit, almost as if it had been struck by lightning several times over. I had to venture into it, my curiosity pulled me in as if it had a rope tied around my waist… but that was also the direction in which the scream had come from, I was frightened, but at the same time I wanted to help whomever made that scream. I picked up a stick and set fire to, I decided to use it as a torch,but as soon as I picked it up the fire burned uncontrollably as if it were possessed, I dropped it. I went back down to pick it up, but I felt a chilled breath on my neck along with a hushed whisper in my ear, "Don't Go", it said. Again, I turned around and saw no one behind me. At this point I was so scared that my hands were shaking frantically. Most people would just run away or sit down and cry but I wanted to save that woman, the invisible rope was pulling me in. I picked up the torch and began to walk towards the house. With every step forward the lightning struck unpredictably around me, getting closer and closer to me with every step forward. I started to run with the lightning close behind me, it seemed as if it were chasing me. When I finally reached the house I saw that it was on fire, it emitted an orange tinge, along with a eery feeling. Everything told me to stay away, all of the signs to me “Do not enter!” but there was a girl was trapped inside. How could I just abandon her? I didn't know what to do or how to help so I just followed the tugging, it tugged, tugged, and tugged, with each I could feel the tug growing stronger, something was calling me to the girl. I eventually lost all control, running through the blaze and eventually carrying the girl. Everything began to blur, all I know is when I got out I collapsed and fell to the floor-everything went black...

I woke up, who knows how long later and I slowly sat up. The first thing I noticed was that the sun was out, but it seemed to have a cover of... what looked like black liquid, it, it was engulfing the sun to the point that almost no light emitted from it. I thought to myself, "What is surrounding the sun?." My train of thought broke when the girl came from the forest and sat down next to me. She handed me a...she handed me a, a, an iron pickaxe and looked straight into my eyes and said, "Thank you for saving my life." She then kissed me on the cheek, blushed and looked away. I looked at her and asked, "How long have I been asleep?" "You have slept for 2 days now," she replied. She then asked me, "did you get transported to this world as well?" "Yes”, I replied, “ I was just playing some Minecraft on, and then suddenly I appeared in this world," She told me that something similar had happened to her, but that story is for

another time. I asked her if she had any clue of what was going on, or how this happened and she told me that she had found only a couple of things so far. She had gotten out her notebook and opened up to a page then handed it to me and this is what it said:

-We are in a random Minecraft world.
-The same rules of Minecraft apply.
-We are not alone.(There are many half built houses from other players)
-The sun is surrounded by a black eery liquid
-Herobrine is chasing us...

I was turning pages of the journal to see if their was more but all I read was, I met this cute guy today, before she snatched the book out of my hand. She snapped at me, "Don't read that!” She introduced herself to me, "my name is Emily, what is yours?" "My name is Cody," I replied. I then asked her who Herobrine was and she said that all she knew about Herobrine was this, this old Minecraft folklore that her dad used to tell her about.

She started to tell me the story that her dad told her; A long time ago there were two brothers named Steve and Herobrine. They were the best of friends and did everything together. They shared toys and played games together but they were getting older and began to drift further and further apart until one day, Steve met this girl named Alexa. Steve would always hang out with Alexa, play with Alexa, but not with Herobrine. At first Herobrine was sad but then he began to get angry at Alexa for taking his brother away from him. Herobrine wanted to see Steve, so he would sneak into Steve's room every night and stare at him. He refused to blink because he wanted to look at Steve as much as he could. Soon Herobrine's eyes began to turn white. So one night Herobrine went out into the woods to think, to think about what he was going to do when he was approached by a man. The man said mysteriously “I know everything about you Herobrine” and handed him a potion. He then says, with a malicious grin, “ drink this and all your problems will be solved.” Herobrine reluctantly drank the potion and the man suddenly disappears. Herobrine starts to shake and all of a sudden he feels... different. He takes a step forward and suddenly teleports, He waves his arms up and lightning strikes out of the sky, he puts his hands down and lava spawns were his hands are pointing. But with every time he moves he feels a bit of himself going away. He teleports to his home and looks in the mirror and to his horror, his eyes are completely white. Herobrine begins to laugh. “Ha Ha Ha Ha HA HA HA HA HA HA HA hahahah”. He feels himself slipping and all of his emotions start to fade away, all except for Steve, for Alexa and for Revenge. He lost his mind and he teleports into Alexa's house...


Just as the story comes to a conclusion, lightning struck at the place where Emily was sitting, I quickly dived and pushed her out-of-the-way of the lightning. The lightning materialized down next to me striking the ground with a ground shaking blow. The fearsome lightning caused a booming sound that made my ears ring. At this point I was just lying there panicking, My ears were in pain from the sound of the roaring lightning and for some reason it was extremely hot. I felt like I just wanted to give up, Just lie there and let the lightning deliver its final blow to me. Just as I was about to give up all of my hope I felt like I was moving. I looked back and Emily was dragging me with all of her might. I looked into her emerald green eyes and said,"why are you dragging me"? She said something but I couldn't hear her , all I could was the ringing in my ears. What did you say!", I replied. At this point she figured out that I could barely hear so she pointed behind me. I turned my head to look and there was a huge fire were the lightning had struck. Thump! My body fell along with Emily. She got back up and tried to pull me away from the fire but she couldn't. Thump! Thump! Thump! She kept trying to save me, risking her own life, by trying her hardest to get me out of there. She fell down again and then I looked at her and thought to myself,"If I give up will she? She is trying with all her might to help me and i'm just lying here. I can't give up because I have to help her. I have to make sure she is safe. I stood up and picked her up from the floor and put her on my back. As I ran, I felt a strangely familiar tug, and a whisper in my ear “I told you to stay away”. I tripped, screaming in pain and fear I muttered “Hold on to me i'm going to run, " as I picked her back up.
If you like this story please give a diamond and a comment. It would help me a lot. Thanks!

Part two coming soon!
I am working with other writers to make a part two. It should be better because I am working with others instead of by myself. If there is anything that you want included please comment and I will do my best to add it. Thanks for reading and supporting!
Credit:Iam2k, The entire community

Update #2 : 05/24/2016 5:22:35 pm5/24/16

I added a better ending to the story. This is still a cliffhanger but it seems like a good place to end but still be a cliffhanger.

Update #1 : 05/17/2016 8:22:06 am5/17/16

I updated the story after getting feedback about what some people liked and what they did not. I also had a lot of feedback from a friend named iam2k who gave me many tips on how I can improve my writing.

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Finished part II of the story. It is kind of short but please take a look and tell me what you think. Remember to diamond comment and subscribe if you like please.

http://www.planetminecraft.com/blog/the-days-of-herobrine-part-ii/
  • Blakest
  • Level 21
  • Expert Artist
  • June 1, 2016, 10:05 pm
Congrats on getting into the Finals!
Thanks :)
  • Orphis
  • Level 4
  • Apprentice Explorer
  • May 27, 2016, 5:48 pm
Good story very interesting
Lovely Job!
  • Gongbanza
  • Level 1
  • New Explorer
  • May 24, 2016, 4:53 pm
interesting story
Thanks, But I wish people would say what they like and what they don't like because I would really like to improve but I cant do that when I don't know what people want/like. :(
I'm ok with any type of comments. If you hate it just say so I can work to improve it.
(I say this in general its not directed at you.) :P
  • Gongbanza
  • Level 1
  • New Explorer
  • May 25, 2016, 11:03 am
No I enjoyed the pacing it was a little fast paced at the end though, but overall the story was good and I enjoyed a good read this Herobrine story was the best that I have read on this site. continue with the stories and they will improve which will make it more enjoyable to a broader audience which is always good. I look forward to more stories that is if you continue making stories. Keep up the great work:)
Thank you for your comments. They mean a lot.
  • Gongbanza
  • Level 1
  • New Explorer
  • May 25, 2016, 11:25 am
np
  • Lava_Creep
  • Level 7
  • Apprentice Explorer
  • May 21, 2016, 8:44 am
Desc: It's a great story when it comes to fear I actually got scared even though I knew that's just herobrine it's kind of uninteresting but it's still a great story except the conclusion that was kind of boring
Recommendation: Fix the ending to satisfy your audience, also revamp the introduction that's really important
Overall: It was scary when it shouldn't be that's what I loved but the introduction wasn't interesting enough to keep readers hooked 7.6/10
Comments: I'm not a fan of stuff like "I'm stuck in this world kind of thing" but that's k I'm not your audience
Thanks for your advice
  • DragonLilly
  • Level 17
  • Journeyman Scribe
  • May 20, 2016, 11:19 am
hewoo :3 i fixed my story abit yall come check it out
  • DragonLilly
  • Level 17
  • Journeyman Scribe
  • May 19, 2016, 3:04 pm
ok but it might be abit im worken or Ladybug atm but ill do it :D
  • DragonLilly
  • Level 17
  • Journeyman Scribe
  • May 19, 2016, 1:57 pm
i could help ya ^-^ if ya need
That would be great! Thanks a lot.
  • DragonLilly
  • Level 17
  • Journeyman Scribe
  • May 19, 2016, 12:21 pm
hey element ya know it might be good to do a skin for the girl :3 and the main char cuz it adds more sense to it ^-^ but good so far and could you give me some tips on my story aswell i just want to other veiw points before i add more
Ya, I am not the best writer. This is only my first story but I will do my best to give you some feedback.
Also XD I cant make skins. I am very bad as skins.
Hey everyone, just a quick update. I am working on making a part two now and I decided that I will be making a bunch of these stories and maby one day doing a role play with them. If you have any feedback or things you might want added to the story then please tell me. Thanks
  • Gongbanza
  • Level 1
  • New Explorer
  • May 25, 2016, 11:26 am
sounds like a great idea
So everyone that likes this story and would like to see more please drop a comment or diamond so I know if the community wants more. I am also open to criticism so I can improve on my next story. This is really the first story I have ever wrote out of school and I had a lot of fun writing it.
  • Proudyzee
  • Level 10
  • Journeyman Engineer
  • May 16, 2016, 2:58 am
Good story, half romance, friendship triangle and uh..
The potion scene is a little bit fast enough leaving the question how herobrine really succeed to earn his power. Who is the man that gives potion to the Herobrine and how did he know?

This is just an opinion btw. Negative sides on this opinion aren't easily noticed.

in my opinion i could rate this 3.8/5
Thanks for the comment, but for this this I want the readers to have those questions. If this story is liked by enough people I plan to add more blogs going into backstories about all of those things. I already have written a bunch of stuff for the next part any you slowly learn more about everyone. :P

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