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Vanquishing the Fears (LoST S1 Round 1)

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John woke up under a tree in the dreadful storm. He got up quickly and looked around to find shelter, but there was nothing there. Then, in the moment the lighting struck the ground in front of him, a house appeared out of nowhere. John was puzzled by this, but he did not spend much time thinking about it and went inside to get out of the storm.



When he got inside the house, he saw a long hallway before him. The hallway looked to him as if it stretched out forever. He noticed a candle on the floor next to him, so he picked it up and started walking. In the hallway, there were a lot of doors, but all of them were locked. All of these doors had signs on them with the names of different people. John continued walking, until he felt something was touching his hand. He looked and saw the little spider that he had not noticed earlier. Immediately, he hit the spider and it fell to the floor. John hated spiders, especially the small ones.



After following the hallway, he stumbled upon an opened door with the name “Timothy” on it. Inside he saw a little boy crying in the corner. He approached him, but the boy screamed immediately, telling him to go away. John sat down next to the boy, but once he did, the boy simply disappeared. With even more questions in his head, John left the room and continued through the hallway.



Eventually, he stumbled upon another room with an open door, but this one had his name on it. He walked inside, but there was nothing there, only the darkness. After another look at the room, he noticed cobwebs everywhere and realized that this is the room where the spider came from. Suddenly, the door shut. Then, the boy emerged from the shadows. Spiders started to gather all around the boy, but he did not fear them, he did not even move. Finally, the boy spoke:


“Why did you kill that poor creature? You are just like them, you do not appreciate the beauty of these fine things. I am no longer afraid of you ignoring me, I will instead show you the beauty of these spiders.”



The spiders came from everywhere and gathered around John. The man was terrified and he did not know what to do. Only one thought gave him comfort in this moment - he knew that it would be over soon. So it was, at least for now…



All of the spiders were gone, John was not in the room anymore. He did not know where he was, he was surrounded by only darkness. He could hear voices two coming from around him:


“Status report.” - the first voice said.


“The boy has successfully overcome his fear. He is no longer afraid that people will ignore him and he is proud of who he is. He is to be taken out of the simulation immediately.” - said the second voice.


“And the man?” - the first voice continued.


“He has yet to overcome his fear of spiders. Perhaps a few more simulations will help him.” - answered the second voice


“Very well.”



John woke up once again under a tree in the dreadful storm. Then, just like the first time, in the moment the lighting struck the ground in front of him, a house appeared out of nowhere. He went inside, not knowing the horrors he’d have to relive again...


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CreditYuki, Pikamoar, Lola_
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  • Rave-
  • Level 3
  • Apprentice Warrior
  • May 3, 2015, 11:20 pm
It had everything a horror story needs. However, it lacked the descriptive sentences I had began to expect from you. I followed and enjoyed the story, but it didn't paint a picture like I wanted it to. Nice job though and good luck c;
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • May 4, 2015, 4:10 am
in my defence, descriptive sentences are the hardest and I spent literally 10 minutes on this. I'll try doing better next round.

(also I won by default because my opponent had no time to make a story...boring, isn't it?)
  • Rave-
  • Level 3
  • Apprentice Warrior
  • May 5, 2015, 7:21 am
You wrote this is 10 minutes? Wow! This is really great for the time frame. It seems as though ever person who entered this contest was on short notice.
Bummer about the competition. I would have liked to see this compared to someone else's short notice story.
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • May 5, 2015, 7:23 am
I think we all rushed ourselves because of the polls, so that they don't last forever etc.
  • YTCereal
  • Level 16
  • Journeyman Network
  • April 28, 2015, 7:57 am
Beautfiul. #ZathForSiteMod2016
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • April 28, 2015, 10:41 pm
god forbid >_>
  • AkirAssasin
  • Level 29
  • Expert Ninja
  • April 27, 2015, 4:38 am
Oooh... lucky I'm not against you.
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • April 27, 2015, 5:08 am
yes, yes you are :P
  • Punkamoar
  • Retired Moderator
  • Level 50
  • Grandmaster Gent
  • April 26, 2015, 1:19 pm
Very nice.
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • April 27, 2015, 5:08 am
thanks ^-^
Omg this is amazing. The suspense made me keep reading till the end. You are a very good writer! I would hate to live in a world like that where in order to get over your fears, you have to go through simulators... But this is an amazing peice of writing! Keep it up! <3
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • April 26, 2015, 8:19 am
Thanks ^-^
Usually I only make these things good for a contest, I guess it kinda motivates me or something. This one specifically is for "League of Story Telling", so yeah, fun.
Thats cool!
  • Art Dei Tech
  • Level 56
  • Grandmaster Grump
  • April 26, 2015, 7:23 am
Good moral, not exactly the horror i expected from the jukebox xD
  • Zatharel
  • Level 44
  • Master Sweetheart
  • April 26, 2015, 7:55 am
haha yeah

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