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Story #1 [The Nether][FEEDBACK IS WANTED]

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created 03/31/2014 10:33 am by Skine_
last reply 04/02/2014 11:41 am
Hello, and i have written a little story a while ago and i was wondering if anyone likes it or not because it has very little views, or is that because story's are not "in" right now?
If you would like to visit the story and would like to give me some feedback on it, here is the link--->

If you would want to give me some ideas on my next PM me here!
Cya later!
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04/02/2014 11:41 am
Level 23 : Expert Dragon
03/31/2014 11:07 am
Level 18 : Journeyman Pony
Too much use of exclamation marks. Perhaps you should use more descriptive words, bundle up your sentences into paragraphs, etc. Overall, a decent story, but it could use more work.
04/01/2014 9:48 pm
Level 23 : Expert Dragon
(Sorry for late response)
Thank for the feedback and this was my first story I just thought of out of no where. Hope to see you take a look at my other work. Have a good day/night!

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