First off, the mic quality is terrible. What exactly do you use as a mic? Second off, the gameplay FPS is pretty bad, which makes it a lot harder to watch. Third I'm going to say, is that you're kind of a squeaker, so try and use a program such as Audacity to slightly deepen your voice, as that way it will be easier to watch. Last off, try and get an editing software that is good, because if you do everything properly, you're videos will look much more professional! Don't take this personally, it's all just constructive criticism, and another tip is to get some channel art. I could maybe give it a go, so add me on Skype: andramanthegamer
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Good luck on your YouTubing journey
- andraman