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Being killed [Minecraft Poem]

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CrafterDragon's Avatar CrafterDragon
Level 42 : Master Dragon
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Day after day
I spawn in my bed
under my house
that looks like a shed

My hunger goes down
My life runs out
I hear the mobs coming
Should I scream and shout?

Another day passes
And I'm in my bed again
Getting killed over and over
This is getting insane

I've crafted armor
and packed some food
but I'm still despawning
I'm getting in a mood

I contanct Mojang
Still no reply
I always get killed
I'm starting to cry

Why me I ask
What have I done wrong?
I'm quiting now
my life is now long.
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nolez15
03/25/2014 11:43 am
Level 24 : Expert Toast
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Section 3 is the only one that doesn't flow very well.

This is still pretty well done, and funny.
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CrafterDragon
03/25/2014 12:04 pm
Level 42 : Master Dragon
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Thanks! I agree. It does flow unless you pronance again more like insane.
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-WaffleKing-
03/23/2014 1:25 pm
Level 40 : Master Electrician
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The concept is good, but the lines are too basic. Try to make the poem more complex. Otherwise good job.
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CrafterDragon
03/23/2014 1:30 pm
Level 42 : Master Dragon
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Thanks for your feedback. To be honest with you I wanted this to be basic. If you read my earlier poem about Herobrine you would know that this poem and that poem are very different. Thats what I wanted but I agree, it is TOO basic.
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