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The MineLands part 1: Where am i?

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Jurascuka5
Level 20 : Expert Lumberjack
Mhmm... Where am i? Said Tim. Eh... what is going on? Tim saw he is at middle of nowhere. Tim decited to try a place there live. But right now he is too shocked. He don't remember how do he get here. Weirdest thing is that, this place doesn't looks like normal world. Trees was too gigantic. There was lots of weird animals. One animal was red pig with long legs and very small eyes. Another animal had a white skin and very short body, and it had a black eyes. Tim was scared he wanted to find a place there to live. Most scaryest is that.... he doesn't remember where is he. And this place for him is very weird. Will be continued!!!!!!!!!!!!!................
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Dude, there are a lot of errors in this.... There's lots of repeated information, incorrect grammer, incorrect spelling, and speaking in the present and past tense at the same time. Still, it was a fun read. Good job!
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  • Jurascuka5
  • Level 20
  • Expert Lumberjack
  • January 16, 2013, 3:51 am
Ty, i know me grammar and english is bad -_-. Im trying to make it better.
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Good man. If you want help with this stuff, maybe take an online tutorial? also, if you feel comfortable doing it, i recommend enrolling in the Infini-Garde accademy (look it up in the blogging section) and ask for greytopher as your teacher. Again, this is just a suggestion. You do not have to do it if you don't want to.
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