It is really bad.
First of all, your grammer is horrible. The first diary i picked up was almost impossible to read!
Second: You spawn in mid-air. with creative mode still enabled. After you've finished building a map, you should not forget to switch it back to survival mode and make sure the player spawns where he has to!
Also the rooms where boring and empty. There are no rules or books telling you what to do, so you'll see
yourself trying to find this out more than even trying to complete this map.
If you want this map to be succesfull, fully re-creating it is possibly the best option.