| Black Echoes | [contest]

Updated on Jul 30th, 2018, 7/30/18 11:11 am | 1 logs
Published Jul 29th, 2018, 7/29/18 3:57 am

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Rox
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Hi everyone! Here today with a poem I've written for this contest, fairly abstract from the theme and apologies if it seems to taper off towards the end (poems over 200 words are very hard to write!) I hope you enjoy, please do leave me some creative feedback or just your opinion on it in the comment section. <3

(also found here if the images fail to load! enjoy my godawful last minute rushed pixel "art" and bad graphics because I can't be bothered illustrator for the 657th time :))

Explanation;

I wanted to pull a creative twist on the theme, from the details provided what really spoke to me at the moment was the perceptions we sometimes have over our lives, affected by whatever mindset we are in, when heartbreak happens, when you lose something, when things aren't going all that good in life or even just in your mind. We are always enabling ourselves to rule our own perception of ourselves and everything around us, and I think sometimes we let a negative perception wash over too readily even though everything isn't as bad as we see it to be - we lie to ourselves and convince ourselves that it's wrong, or bad, or that some things are true when they really aren't.

to me the idea of a story behind 'underwater ruins' really represents - in accordance to the above concepts, false perception, things of the past that keep us feeling like we're drowning. Like there's a lot of pressure and unsettled emotions, disturbances. I didn't want to write just about how there was something once positive built before and how it got wrecked by something and all that's left now is a pile of rubble, I wanted to write about the ruins we see when we let our head get the better of ourselves. A lot of personal references are included in the poem - some very vague, all very intentional and meaningful if you look enough. I really hope this idea is strong enough to relate to the theme directly and to not be disqualified due to it's abstractness.

Hope you're able to take something out of it and see my intentions, thank you for reading if you do!

Tags	Art Poetry Underwater Poem Water Black Ink Depth Perception Ruins Sirens Call Murky

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Update #1 : by Rox 07/30/2018 11:11:31 amJul 30th, 2018

fixed all of the graphics and updated some of the description + tags

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08/30/2018 1:36 am

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Zatharel

grats nerd <3

08/01/2018 6:32 am

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r5tuning09

Nice ! This poem is very sought after that's what I like.

07/30/2018 7:09 pm

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Makaneek

confusing but cool!

07/30/2018 11:11 am

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BIO

Heck! This is so good!!!

07/30/2018 11:15 am

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07/30/2018 4:43 pm

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BIO

don't stop writing pls honey uwu

07/30/2018 6:49 pm

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07/31/2018 12:49 am

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BIO

owo

07/29/2018 5:51 am

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Zatharel

"A manifestation of ego's brain bubbling down

under the masque of self-worth and integrity

into a thick mud

painted with entitlement

across a dotted line

the deeds of your fascinations

possessions to another

inclinations unbeknownst to you,

against the black skies

opposing truths of deflection

you find yourself with silkless ink

writing what you think it to be

beyond your skin

and the closer the pen drips

the tighter the bolts become

on the grips over your perception

a darker rainstorm

straining out

lifelessly. "

I'm gonna frame this somewhere I swear.