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Dead Frost "Creepy Pasta"
ajascanio51
WarpCircuit
So here it starts a nice chilling morning here in Alaska but what was this shadowy figure standing outside my doorway it whispered away slowly I tapped it... it turned around with a MENACING BLOODTHIRSTY face it said Welcome To Dead Frost Me: Who Are You! Dead Frost: I... Im your friend.. Me:I don't remember Dead Frost: Its Me Max... *said in perverted clown voice* *LAUGH LAUGH LAUGH* Me: Runs out cabin and then I come across an alley way and I saw a... portal in the distance I.. went over to touch it but it was to late... Dead Frost already caught me.. Dead Frost: *Blood tear drips down Dead Frost's Face* END OF THE LINE! Me: Wait max I think I... remember you now... I Killed you IT IT.. WAS ME!!! I... Dead Frost:Its to late *smirk* Me: MAAAAA.... Dead Frost: your dead now Allen... Your dead.. now I hope u die in the bloody depths of hell Goodbye... (THATS IT GUYS I HOPE YOU ENJOYED ME CREEPYPASTA STORY I HOPE YOU SUPPORT ME GIVE GOOD COMMENTS AND I LIVE YOU ALL THANX BYE! )
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Everyone needs to start somewhere. I'd perhaps try uploading this in an attachment where you prettied it up with word. If that doesn't work you could always center the story and make it another color with the options PlanetMinecraft grants its users.
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This is a little late, but...
I'd like to see more Minecraft ones, but you should post them in the Ghosts in the Code forum and act like it's real.
ajascanio51that's it im done with creepypasta making I suck im done
I'd like to see more Minecraft ones, but you should post them in the Ghosts in the Code forum and act like it's real.
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that's it im done with creepypasta making I suck im done
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lol don't give up so easily. How many have you made?
Your creepy pasta is fine but it doesn't really scare a lot of people, lol. You have to build up the suspense and space things out in a way where people won't expect the next line. You currently smashed everything into a paragraph where I can clearly see what's incoming.
*EDIT*
It starts in a nice chilly morning in Alaska...a shadowy figure stands outside my doorway. It whispered slowly away as I approached it, and I tapped it.
It turned around with a menacing face.
*insert horrible photo here*
"Welcome to Dead Frost..."
"Who are you!?", I exclaim.
"It's Me...MAX!"
He begins says that in a perverted clown's voice, and begins laughing...
I run out of the cabin, coming across an alley way. Seeing a portal in the distance, I sprint but do not make it in time; Dead Frost already caught me, trapping me away from all ways of escape.
Blood drips down its face. "END OF THE LINE!"
I stare at its face. Fumbling for a reply, words automatically flow out of my mouth.
"Wait, Max...I think I...remember you now..."
"I killed you, didn't I...? It...it...it was me..."
Dead Frost smirks. "It's too late..."
I try to shout, but he shuts my mouth with his hand. Stench fills my nose.
"You're dead now, Allen."
"You're dead now...NOW I HOPE YOU DIE IN THE BLOODY DEPTHS OF HELL! Goodbye..."
He snickers at the end, sending chills down my spine. I close my eyes, as his bloody black fingers now run across my chest, before beginning to dig in.
Your creepy pasta is fine but it doesn't really scare a lot of people, lol. You have to build up the suspense and space things out in a way where people won't expect the next line. You currently smashed everything into a paragraph where I can clearly see what's incoming.
*EDIT*
It starts in a nice chilly morning in Alaska...a shadowy figure stands outside my doorway. It whispered slowly away as I approached it, and I tapped it.
It turned around with a menacing face.
*insert horrible photo here*
"Welcome to Dead Frost..."
"Who are you!?", I exclaim.
"It's Me...MAX!"
He begins says that in a perverted clown's voice, and begins laughing...
I run out of the cabin, coming across an alley way. Seeing a portal in the distance, I sprint but do not make it in time; Dead Frost already caught me, trapping me away from all ways of escape.
Blood drips down its face. "END OF THE LINE!"
I stare at its face. Fumbling for a reply, words automatically flow out of my mouth.
"Wait, Max...I think I...remember you now..."
"I killed you, didn't I...? It...it...it was me..."
Dead Frost smirks. "It's too late..."
I try to shout, but he shuts my mouth with his hand. Stench fills my nose.
"You're dead now, Allen."
"You're dead now...NOW I HOPE YOU DIE IN THE BLOODY DEPTHS OF HELL! Goodbye..."
He snickers at the end, sending chills down my spine. I close my eyes, as his bloody black fingers now run across my chest, before beginning to dig in.
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Please, Slow down. Its not like your payed to pump out bad stories.
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This kind of has the same name as the game I'm making ._.
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This was really rushed and confusing. Slow down and add detail and try to clarify your story a little more.
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Wasn't scary and made no sense. Take your time writing, and build up the creepy mood more slowly. Look at creepypasas then look at yours. Are they riddled with smilies? only a paragraph long? probably not.
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are you 8
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Please try not to use emotes in stories and try to work on how you do your dialogues.
Also this reminded me of this. Dead Frost Online.
Also this reminded me of this. Dead Frost Online.
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You made one of these 20 minutes ago.
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True.
