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Hey guys, Cobey here and I'm looking for some feedback on my work in progress novel. It's an action/adventure, magic-y, fantasy novel set in a fictional world called the 'Realm'. It follows the story of a teenage girl as she both searches for revenge and tries to save a friend. You can read what I've written so far here: http://www.booksie.com/action_and_adventure/novel/cobey_h/the-power-of-a-girl/chapter/1
Any feedback is much appreciated.
Thanks in advance,
~Cobey
Any feedback is much appreciated.
Thanks in advance,
~Cobey
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Thanks for your support everyone! I really appreciate it
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I think you should continue your novel! I myself are writing a novel, but it has rather, excessive, language. But, I see great potential for you! If someone says that you suck at what you do and you should just give up, don't listen to them!!!! People did that to me during school when I was writing stories. You'll become one of the greats, I guarantee it.
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I will check it out and yes you should continue your Novel.
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Great writing! Keep it up, but don't let writers block stop you. You don't get inspiration from looking at a blank page, go for a walk or something, observe what's around you, ideas will feel like they're writing themselves. I'm writing a novel too, it's currently 30,000 words long and at times I considered giving up, but don't. Just take a break. Lots of ideas that I've got have simply came from me doing nothing, and then out of no-where thinking of a great idea.
Keep up the good work.
Keep up the good work.
-H-MAN_25
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Just remember no matter what everyone tells you, just do what you love and wanna do.
Amazing novels by the way you got real talent.
Amazing novels by the way you got real talent.
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The answer to your question is simple. Yes.
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keep writing
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Bump....don't forget to check out all 10 chapters so far. More on the way too
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Bump
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Please bump only once every 24 hours.
It doesn't seem too bad. All I can say to improve is to use less speech included directly into the story. Speech makes a chapter long, but not as worthwhile. Speech should be used for the important sections which must be heard. When you began you could have said eagerly Rachael called for her uncle, rather than having a speech part. Also use a bit more description. I wouldn't mind seeing where this is going. So I suggest continuing on it!
It doesn't seem too bad. All I can say to improve is to use less speech included directly into the story. Speech makes a chapter long, but not as worthwhile. Speech should be used for the important sections which must be heard. When you began you could have said eagerly Rachael called for her uncle, rather than having a speech part. Also use a bit more description. I wouldn't mind seeing where this is going. So I suggest continuing on it!
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I would read it if you posted it on here, keep going,I love it
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bump
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I don't want to sound
but you should do what you want to do whether or not you want to show it.
but you should do what you want to do whether or not you want to show it.
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Well I was planning on continuing to write it, what I meant by the title is should I keep posting it for other people to read or should I just keep it private. I've gotten a bit of positive feedback, but I wanted more opinions
