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A boy called "Tom" was a cool gamer, he played a lot of games, like Minecraft.
One day his computer broke, (lol he used Windows Vista) so he went to Ebay to buy a new one.
He purchased it from a guy called: "ExpertThief". Pretty suspicious, right?
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One day his computer broke, (lol he used Windows Vista) so he went to Ebay to buy a new one.
He purchased it from a guy called: "ExpertThief". Pretty suspicious, right?
Next part:
Part 2
The computers OS (Operation System) was Windows 10. Tom also purchased another computer from "ExpertThief", its OS was Windows Infinity. It is not real, so you can take that "Expert" off. But, here is a few bad things. Tom did not know what a Virus is, so most of his programs/games were from Softonic. Ya know, downloading stuff randomly. Next bad thing is that Tom did not know what a Scammer is, but he did know what a Spam is, mixing them both. I know this is not creepy, but if it is and/or you dont want to read any more, quit. But here is the next part:
Part 3
Tom launched Windows Infinity and Windows 10. Windows Infinity looked like it had infinite windows on it, the desktop and stuff, ya know what i mean. Windows 10 was really hard to install, since the only OS Tom used was Windows Vista. Windows Infinity was also hard, but then... Next part:
Part 4
The Windows Infinity computer showed a blank, white, screen. Tom tought this was normal, but then the computer screen showed a blue smiley face :) and it said: Hello, Tom. I know you are here. Windows 10 computer turned off. Windows Infinity said then: You are not going any where. The screen started glitching. After that, Tom rapidly did figure it out: "ExpertThief"! I was extremely stupid! Tom tried to shut the Windows Infinity off, but no. Computer said: I just wanted to play a game. Then it showed a blue sad face. :( Then tom ran away. But the computer just said: I have legs and arms. I will catch you. Then the computer sucked Tom inside him, and he started a video game called: Hello Neighbor. It was the alpha 2, and the Neighbor was the Computer. Rapidly, he saw the Windows 10 computer broken by Windows Infinity. Tom shouted at the Computer: You are stupid! I will destroy you! Tom found a gun from Neighbors (computers) shed, and started shooting the Computer. Then he got catched. Now Tom shouted: Mom! Help me!!! Then Tom woke up from his own bed, (in real life) and his mom came. He asked: What? Tom said: I just saw a stupid nightmare! I will not play games anymore this YEAR! Or, week. THE END!!!
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Ok, some advice
Don't use "Next part:" for your transitions, it's repetitive and shows lack of effort. Next, try to refrain from breaking the fourth wall in a way that makes it seem like it isn't.. well.... fully detailed or has no effort as well ("Ya know what I mean", etc.) Part 4 really bugs me, because you say stuff like this, "Computer said:" Don't do that, it just looks... not.. normal for a story. Try using quotation marks ("[insert text here]") since they are used in stories for when characters are talking. Also if you do this, don't forget to put commas and a space before (Example: Tom shouted at the computer, "You're stupid! I will destroy you!") "I was extremely stupid! Tom tried to shut the Windows Infinity off, but no." Don't switch the point of view unless you change characters or tell us (Example: ~Tom's Point of View~, etc.) Also try remove the blue faces, people know what they look like, you don't need to show us it and interrupt the story. Stuff just started to fall apart, sound choppy, and made no. complete. sense. in. part. FOUR! I know dreams make no sense, but that's no excuse. I recommend trying to detail your writing, and try not to rush.