Hey Party People! Could you please do me a HUGE favor and checkout my latest video?

I tried some new techniques and I'd like honest feedback and opinions. I know everyone says that because they want views, but like seriously, how can I improve?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=73AE6lRh5j0

Also, m0cchi just released a video in the same series if you're interested.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_wGnaYZ7ico

Thank you all for helping me out and being supportive. Just 971 more subscribers and 3975 more hours of watch time, and I can start thinking about quitting my day job ;)