Dear SneakzHD, your map is looking good, but there are some things to fix.
1. Firstly, the main thing is to make an English version, you don't know what will happen when you press a button.
2. When you die, you'll spawn outside the building, seeing the redstone and commandblock system and I had to break the wall to come back.
3. The map is very short.
If you fix those problems (maybe the last one is not important), I can say it's a 'redstone and command block practising' map for you.
But don't worry, you're on a good path! :) I'll leave you a diamond and subscribe for inspirating