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Chapter One: The First Day

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MirrorSabotage's Avatar MirrorSabotage
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New Player Spawns in a new world.



"Well... so this is minecraft," player looks around "Hmmm... Sheep... pigs... What the? How the heck did that cow get in that tree?"



Player walks over to the tree and calls up "Hey! Mr cow... how you get up there? You want to come down?" Player hits the tree and a log block pops off but the tree nor the cow fell!

"OK... that's a bit weird!" he puchers the rest of the tree and stood back to wait for the cow to fall when he stepped to far and fell into a cave.



"Ouch! That hurt!" The player gets up and look's around "Man it's dark down he..." suddenly a arrow flys past his head "What the! Where did that come from?" a skeleton steps out of the shadows.

"Oh crap!" The skeleton shoots another and this time hits the player. "Ouch! Got to get out!"



Starts to run away and the skeleton follows. "Come on there needs to be a exit somewhere...!" Player turns a corner and runs into a creeper.



"Oh shit...!" Creeper blows killing the player.



The player spawns back at the surface. What a start... this isn't a walk in the park at all, and I lost all my wood...great it's all ready past midday and got nothing to show for it... I better start to look for place to settle down!"



A short walk later he comes across a village. "Well finally a place to settle... and they got wheat, carrots and potatoes."



He walks up to a villager and asks "Hi... I'm new here and was wondering if you guys would put me up some where and give me some food... plus it is getting dark and there are these skeletons and big green dick shaped things that blow up...!" the villager looks blankly at the player and nods.



To be continued!
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03/07/2013 4:53 pm
Level 30 : Artisan Spelunker
kaihiwatari55
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Hey, I'm gonna help you since this is your first blog. First, cut back on the cursing. You sound like a sixth grader who just learned what those words meant. Second, follow correct dialog rules.
Ex. Kaihiwatari said,"Like this!"
"I get it now!" said MirrorSabotage.
Always put dialog in a new paragraph if the open quote starts it (like your dialog in the thing above).
Third, get creative! This is YOUR story, you don't need to make it EXACTLY like Minecraft. Make the villagers talk and interact with things. If you need help on that, read the series I made on my profile. It's THE MINECRAFT ADVENTURES. I hope your next blog is more refined with these tips I gave you!
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03/08/2013 4:54 am
Level 16 : Journeyman Architect
MirrorSabotage
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Ok.. I understand, I just thought if I did stray people wouldn't like it. I'll cut down on the swearing... but by how much may I ask? How much would be ok, 1 or 2 swears?



I would love feed back! :)
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03/08/2013 3:52 pm
Level 30 : Artisan Spelunker
kaihiwatari55
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Hmmm...I'd say 4 or less swears in each part, UNLESS it's necessary for a comedic part or something.
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03/09/2013 10:11 am
Level 16 : Journeyman Architect
MirrorSabotage
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OK, thanks for the feed back. :)
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