Needing Feedback on Newest Minecraft Tutorial?

Hey ther peeps! (my official intro if you haven't noiced) I would like some feedback on my newest minecraft tutorial, I would really appreciate it. Please don't be harsh, but do point out what is wrong (or what's good) and tell me how to correct it. I would also like some feedback on my channel in general. I have been trying at this for a while, , and started with let's plays. That was not originbally my channel goal, but I thought it would pass the time until I got a missing part for my Roxio HD Pro, which I attained yesterday. My original goal is to make HD Minecraft videos, primarily guides and speedbuilds. Skyrim videos, which would be Let's Plays, and COD which would be gun reiviews, and some post commentary about popular topics. Can you plz give me feedback? My next minecraft videos series will be about different mining techniques, and my COD one will be the best class on TDM/FFA/KC on Nuketow 2025. Feedback wanted, thx so much