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avatar DragsZombies
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
An original idea made by DragsZombies

-If you are seeing strange like question mark symbols, don't be alarmed, I do too. I'll be fixing that here soon.-


I will be making a animation of this once I get all the lore and stuff worked out :)

Along with Deathassassin05's help ^.^


-The Rift-

An original Creepy Pasta by DragsZombies and Deathassassin05

Announcement! :D


Episode 1 <<<<< Being rewritten

Written by Deathassassin05

Alexander woke up at around 3:00 a.m., he could hear nothing but the constant whirring of his desktop computer,o��Hm, I might as well check my emailo��,He thought, as he got up and walked over to his computer.o��What is this?o�� He thought as he looked at an email entitled with nothing but, o��The science of fear.o��. He opened up the email, and an attachment began downloading, around the time that the download was half way finished, he heard the doorbell ring, o��Now who would come to my house at 3:00 a.m?o��shrugging off the thought, he walked downstairs to his front door, opened it, and no one was there. o��Stupid pranksters..o�� He thought to himself as he closed the door and walked back to his room upstairs.Since his room was the first door to the left upstairs, he always had a view of the staircase, as he was walking back into his room, he could have sworn that he saw something out of the corner of his eye.

The download was finished now, it was a 30MB .mp4 file. It showed nothing but a black screen, until the last 5 seconds of the 2 minute video. It was a room, with a man standing inside of it, staring at someone who was on a computer. The strangest thing..was that he could have swore that the bed sheets in the video were the same as his. As he cautiously turned around,expecting the worst,something darted across his room, and down the stairs.It looked like some kind of shadowy figure wearing a cloak. Alexander ran down the stairs, chasing after the odd creature, as soon as he went to grab the creature, it vanished into mist. He ran back up to his room, looked back at his computer, the video seemed to have closed, he goes back to his desktop, a face pushing out of the screen before finally shorting-out, causing his whole apartment to lose power, leaving him in pure darkness...

Episode 2 <<< Being rewritten

Written by DragsZombies

Laying on the floor, Meredith shook awake, unaware of her surroundings. All was silent, and all was calm, except one thing, but what.

Shaking slightly, she got to her feet, leaning against the dresser. Her head pounding, slowly making her way toward the bathroom. Squinting slightly, a blurry figure slowly came into view. She rubs her eyes, trying desperately to clear her vision, splashing some water on her face. As the world around her slowly became a reality, stumbling out of the bathroom and to the bedroom, avoiding the various objects surrounding the floor beneath her feet.

Meredith looks about her apartment, slowly regaining her strength and sight.

o��What a night..o�� She says out loud. As she walks out of her apartment, she notices a few things that are a bit differento�¦ Only a few things could be seen in the hallwayo�¦ No one could be seen, not even a slight stur. Even on a Wednesday morning would there be a few people wandering the halls, but there was an eerie feeling in the air.

She looks behind her on the other side of the hall, looking down carefully and squinting to get a better picture. As she slowly tilts her head to the side, she notices something on her shouldero�¦ A dark wispy hand, slowly moving to grasp around her neck...

Expect a new episode every week!

This is a test story made for people's opinion on this creepy pasta.

I have had this idea for years, ever since I was real little. Some parts were sorta based off a tv show, if someone catches that, which was changed up for certain purposes.

Any opinions or things you'd like me to know, or change, can be put in the comments and I appreciate every little bit. ^.^

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CreditDeathassassin05, DragsZombies

9 Update Logs

Update #9 : 11/20/2013 8:53:02 amNov 20th, 2013

Postponed due to my other writer being out of internet and myself with school.

06/01/2015 2:29 am
Level 29 : Expert Creeper
The Wrath
12/22/2015 11:11 pm
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Still needs work. :P Glad you like it though.
07/14/2014 4:48 am
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
This story is really old and needs to be updated, should be better when I have the time to get around to it.
07/13/2014 10:33 pm
Level 21 : Expert Pokemon
Meh. It's aight.
07/11/2014 12:51 am
Level 22 : Expert Pony
11/02/2013 12:22 pm
Level 19 : Journeyman Scribe
It's nice, but I would like it if you didn't do the regular character stupidity of "Oh, somethings downloading on my computer and IDK what it is. I'm going to go do something else."
11/14/2013 10:28 pm
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Yeah, I'll let my other writer know about that. As I have stated already, it's a WIP. :) Thanks for your input.
10/11/2013 4:38 pm
Level 20 : Expert Robot
there used to be a mod called dim doors, and there is a rift in it, and it's actually a sad world that is lost with no portal to get back to. That's a rift in that mod.
10/11/2013 5:05 pm
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Cool. Never heard of it though. This is an original story so :P
09/24/2013 7:17 am
Level 29 : Expert Pixel Painter
Very nice story, I enjoyed it! But may a recommend a few tricks to make it scarier?
-Scary stories are nice in first person, to give it that "I'm the one being scared" feel, instead of "He's being scared" feel (although this is some pretty scary stuff)
-Less repitition, in terms of what's happening. But you did a nice job of trying not to repeat vocabulary, which is excellent
-Use commas and paragraphs to help readers catch their breath to build up suspense, sometimes, even a "..." works (if used correctly)
-Try to give it an eerie feel, but at the same time try to make it dark and ominous instead of dishing out fright. This way when the scary part delivers, it DELIVERS. And when describing scary objects or characters, don't say "a hand grabbed me" or "it was a cup about 8 inches", instead use words that describe what it's LIKE so readers can have free imagination (this is the main reasons why books are better than the movies). Instead, use phrases like: "But then I felt a cold shiver down my spine, and I knew he was holding me" or "It was a small and luminous cup, but something about it didn't seem quite right."

Nice job on keeping in steadfast and not jumpy paced, using good vocabulary and generally giving it a good try. +1
09/24/2013 8:32 am
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Thank you very much Snurly. I will consider this. This whole story is a test to see what I can do to make it better. The whole version of the story won't be out for a long while. ^.^
09/26/2013 1:46 am
Level 29 : Expert Pixel Painter
No problem :D just wanting to help. May I help write future episodes (but not the next one as I am busy now)?
09/26/2013 8:52 am
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Feel free to help anytime, you have my skype(I think..) I appreciate it! :D
09/23/2013 11:33 am
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Episode 2 is out :D
09/23/2013 2:01 am
Level 28 : Expert Dragonborn
omg scariest thing ive ever read i literaly jumped while reading and saw a paper on the floor get moved by my fan
09/23/2013 2:13 am
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
That's good! Means it's working ;) Thanks for commenting, I really appreciate it! ^.^
09/22/2013 10:20 pm
Level 29 : Expert Skinner
blake perren
haha very cool,3am in uk and i gotta say it had my neck hairs standing :) would love to see more
09/22/2013 10:25 pm
Level 34 : Artisan Wolf Whisperer
Ha, Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it! I'll have more up soon!
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