Hey, so i make RP's and was wondering if you guys could say what you think of them?


First one-



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It was a normal day at Zhistyu, a city in the planet called Turvok, 123,000 LY away from a far-away place: the place that was said to be the ancestor of their race, called Earth. Like all other planets though, it was nothing short of a usual business day -- the usual business transactions. Just near its neighbors, the planets of Yuzo, Yquazar, and Juquo have been busy -- it was one of those years where technology was at its peak. New discoveries were abounding: it was merely the time when Warp Drive was closing its conquest in the area, now to be ruled by a new experimental technology called Quadro-Plasmic Thrusters, which was said to exceed 9.99 Warp in the normal Earth scale. It was in those times when space in the Delta Quadrant was as peaceful as it should free...

But all of that changed. That day, a massive timeslip past one of its moons. A timeslip, everyone thought at the time, was impossible. They all knew very well of Yquazar's attempts for a Warp 10 Time Travel. And yet they knew it was impossible.

Or so it seems...

Start as a citizen of Turvok, as a Hybrid Human, and discover the secrets of the Timeslip, and discover the shocking truths and inevitable future of Tyu Sector 300 years into the future -- a future where the Borg would rise up from its fences. Gain new technology. Gain new intel. Gain the trust of your powerful allies: Yuzo, Yquazar, and Juquo. Fight and defend the dear planet before Turvok itself would be caught, lost in the time-space continuum and lost forever.

Format:
[Ship]
Unlike in Galactic Insignia, ships are quite restrictive in these parts, considering that the year is in 2014. It was a time where no Quantum Slipstream could exist, and, despite the advance technology of the Tyu Sector (your sector), it will surely take you as long as 70 years just to get to the Beta Quadrant. Warp Drive will be limited to that of 4.0 - 8.0 (this is based on Startrek Speed). Even weaponry will be limited to that of explosives, plasma weapons, projectiles, and concussives. Unsure or not of what to put here, please use the necessary stat format:

Code:
[Ship]
Name of Ship:
Ship Type:: <please refer to Ship Types>
Ship Captain:
# of Crew:
Attack:
Defense:
Shield:
Hull:
Cargo:

(Stats must equal 20 total -- excluding bonuses of course)
(Cargo WILL include people count. As a hint 1 Cargo = 25 people + 2 tons of resources INCLUDING fuel.)

[Ship Types]
Civllian
(Bonus Stats: Attack (Start Limit to 3); Cargo +3; Resource -6 T)
Civilian-types focus less on attack and more on cargo. One of the advantages of Civilian ships are they MUST be protected by any kind of military ship: even enemy humanoid ships! However, you cannot be protected from robotic races -- that is if such a thing exist. You cannot pass through enemy territory, however, and there's more chances of you to be potentially raided by pirates.

Military
(Bonus Stats: Cargo (Start Limit to 3); Attack +2; Defense +1)
Military-types focus less on cargo and more of the crucial stats of attack and defense. While one disadvantage of Military ship is required protection of Cilivilian ships, you DO benefit from the surplus in your pay from missions. Most often though, you can be limited from the areas you can pass through.

Explorer
(Bonus Stats: Hull (Start Limit to 3); Warp +4)
Explorer-types focus more on warp technology than on hull technology. Often, explorer types are most often neglected by enemy ships (except fanatic ones) and pirate ships, and explorer ships can travel almost anywhere. However, you have less support from the government.

Merchant
(Bonus Stats: Attack & Defense (Start Limit - 3 and 4 // 4 and 3); Cargo +4; Ppl Capacity -100 ppl.)
Merchant-types are more of businessmen in the busy world of Tyu Sector, being able to freely go from neighbouring countries without any kind of limit. There is, however, chances of attacks from Pirates.

Rogue / Starship
These two types are quite similar in that they do not have any bonus of any kind, but are vastly different in terms of advantages. Rogue ships have more advantages over areas where pirates gather, even to the point of being able to barter with them, while Starships have quite a lot support from the government.

Can i use spoilers? ( Code? )


Second-

t is the 3012. The world is facing the greatest threat ever. We have reached the ends of space, some say even time. We haven't stepped on any planets besides Mars and the Moon, but have droids on other. If we have time travel, we may be able to save the Earth. Humans have been living rather peacefully for many years, since the treaty signed after World War X ( 10 ). Humans have advanced in technology greatly, learning about science, all religion has gone. People understand there are races out in the great depths of space, some have learned to fear them.

The World set up a National Government, which has its own army, own money, and even its own spies. Some countries are still weary of each other. They think one country will break the treaty. The National Government is the best in the world, but one of the worst in the Universe. We are below the standard universal army. We have low tech, but we have hope. We have captured weapons that most Armies do not. Guns that use electrons to make black holes, rifts in space in time. Extremely dangerous, it can destroy galaxies.

The Garneux are tribes that live on Mars. All relatively Hostile, but only 5 are what we are worried about. They are the Uni, Amo, jicko, Farrazeh, and Sefed. They all are warriors, they will not usually resolve to missile like weapons. But they do have some. All are laser, type 2 weapons. Type 2 weapons are horrible. Humans have type 5. But if you get into hand-hand combat, you're in trouble. They dont car about losing numbers, they wish to conquer our world, and all others.

They mine precious metals, used for powerful lasers, type 10, the strongest, but it takes tons and ton of it to power enough to destroy a planet.
But there getting closer.

Roles:

Specialties:
Specialist, Spy, Assassin, Bomb expert, mechanic, pilot, air force, soldier.


Human:

Code:
Name:
Specialty: ( Assassination, pilot, air force, bomb expert, Etc. I will allow things to be added)
Weapons: Max. of 5 ( Laser, explosive, thrown, Etc.)
Health:
Rank: ( Optional)
Heavy moves slowly ( Can not be Assassination, bomb expert,)
Medium moves normal ( can only be bomb expert, or assassination)
Light moves swiftly ( May not be pilot, or in the airforce.)



Garneux Warriors have an advantage with Hand to Hand combat.
They do not usually believe in missile weapons.

Code:
Garneux:
Tribe ( Uni, Amo, jicko, Farrazeh, and Sefed. all others are peaceful.)
Specialty: ( Thrown, explosive, mining*, Etc.)
Weapons Max. of 4:
Heavy
Medium
Light



Airforce:

Code:
Ship Hull:
Weapons:
Crew:
Pilots specialty ( Battle, landing Etc.):
Other: ( Optional )






Rules:

No spamming
No God modding
Nothing else listed in Tellers rule topic!
May not pick up any extremely powerful weapons use common sense!









Planets:

Code:
Mars
Earth
Moon
Venus

Code:
Mars Home to Garneux, has the 12 tribes, 5 hostile ( Uni, Amo, jicko, Farrazeh, and Sefed). the others peaceful and 1 neutral, you must find out which ) Advanced tech.


Code:
Earth: Home to Humans, ( where you are located if you are a human)
Moon , Nothing interesting discovered, more of a resting point.



Code:
Venus: Never been searched, a ship was shot down flying over.
The remaining Government is willing to pay much money for the reason.



Bounty Hunter:

Bounty Hunter, ( BH) Roam space looking for employment. They are costly, but for assassination jobs, they are extremely useful. The most expensive, yet best, is currently resting on Mars, protected by the hostile tribes. Others you find such as Nomis can be randomly found in space.


* Mining is important to the tribes from Mars, they mine a precious material, galfrite, that makes powerful lasers that can easily destroy Earth, Or Mars. They still have many days until they have enough to destroy Earth, but is it enough?


Earth:




Mars:



Moon:



Venus:




The Goblins look Gerneux look similar to goblins, the best picture we can get of them alive is this...




The Gerneux live in the cracks and crevices of Mars. As well as UNDER the rocks. They have a complex tunnel system running throughout Mars.


Good luck.


Pictures taken out ( to many to add )
also, some codes and such will appear, as i copied+pasted from other forums i am on that use [Code] commands.