bethenna
Hi, I recently wrote part 1 to a story on pmc (chapters 1 and 2) which can be found here: http://www.planetminecraft.com/blog/the ... ---part-1/
I was just wondering if anyone could possibly give me any feedback, and possible suggest any ideas for what could happen later on in the story and in part 2. Thanks if you offer up a suggestion
I was just wondering if anyone could possibly give me any feedback, and possible suggest any ideas for what could happen later on in the story and in part 2. Thanks if you offer up a suggestion
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Part 2 out now and can be found here: http://www.planetminecraft.com/blog/the ... ---part-2/
Part 3 is in the making
Part 3 is in the making
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Great story! I can't wait to read the next chapter(s)!
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Feeding back...
Okay I really liked that story, I personally want to so some more.
I personally recommend (As a writer irl) that you take time to remove the "BE" verbs from your next chapters and change them to active verbs for greater effect.
"Be" verbs are weak verbs that aren't really necessary in most sentences.
Okay I really liked that story, I personally want to so some more.
I personally recommend (As a writer irl) that you take time to remove the "BE" verbs from your next chapters and change them to active verbs for greater effect.
"Be" verbs are weak verbs that aren't really necessary in most sentences.
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Be Verbs: Is, Am, Are, Was, Were, Be, Being, Been
