MADE THIS WAY LONG AGO THIS IS OLD AND IT SUCKS)

Im Downloading now and i be doing some commentary :D

for a first timer its not bad, but i dont think this was in MC edit so you probably couldn't do some of the extreme things other map makers do. The dodge challenge is a bit easy, however, it destroys itself and ruins a lot of the red stone wiring. if you hit to many squares on it, you end up blowing up the whole room, so make the room out of obsidian or bedrock. Also, put an alternative way to make it up to the lever if you end up losing all options to get bast the dodge one. The station, you need at least one more mine cart for a partner, unless you send it back around. You should probably explane the storm and family thing more, probably with a wizard or something causing this huge horrible storm a few days ago that ravaged the intire land of so and so and the storm killed your family, or your family got dragged down this river by a flood, just some options. some of your snow golems got loose i think, in the bar and the double door building next to the grave yard. The piston thing that should push you into the lava should probably be hidden behind stone so you dont see the pistons, and I didnt even have a pressure plate on mine for some reason, so it didnt even pop out to push me in the lava. but i could tell what you were doing there. Otherwise it seems good, just needs some work, not that bad for a first time.

shortest i ever played but its good for your first but the family thiing was weird