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Cardinal System avatar Cardinal System
Level 22 : Expert Geek
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My heart is like a hummingbird,
forever in a cage;
My heart is like a jasmine flower,
whose peddles do not age;
My heart feels like an orange fruit,
that does not meet the ground;
a fruit whose skin is pierced,
with cloves a thousand round;

My heart slowly burns,
in a pool of endless tears;
My heart swiftly stretches,
from love suppressed for years;
My heart will lay to rest,
and let my body free;
If you show and claim it,
depart it shall from me;

Your gaze is like a breeze,
that carries lavender dew;
Your face a white carnation,
blooming bright and new;
Your hair is like a nebula,
a golden cloud of stars;
Your hair a silver blanket,
a patching for your scars;
Your hand is like a corporal,
a priceless silken veil;
Your hand I long to caress,
To hold so warm and frail;
Like a floating smoke of incense,
like a wind slow and frais;
Your voice is serene and gentle,
your voice lights up these days.

My one desire is halted,
for many view it wrong;
My sinner's crucifixion,
my server's loyal song;
I hope my death will free you,
and keep you safe from wrong;
I hope my dedication,
will show you to be strong;
I wish to only please you,
to fuel your smile's light;
I wish to hear your laughing,
and crying is alright;

But rather than united,
we'll be torn in two;
You'll be locked in darkness,
I'll be tortured through;
This is the evil result,
of showing hidden truths;
This is the fear reaction,
to love in separate youths.
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03/01/2021 12:34 pm
Level 8 : Apprentice Pokemon
LadylikeAlloy24
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OHH your a finalist. I'm telling you! I AM PUTTING ALL MY MONEY FOR YOU TO WIN!!!!!!!
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03/01/2021 4:35 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Thank you so much for the support! I hope everyone else gets a fair chance to win as well.
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03/01/2021 10:45 pm
Level 8 : Apprentice Pokemon
LadylikeAlloy24
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Fair chance? Ain't no fair chance with a poem this good, it should be published!!!!!!!!! I I swear if you dont win i will be headed to corporate offices!!!!!!!!!!!! I TELL YOU CORPORATE OFFICES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AND AFTER YOU WIN YOU WILL BE ON YOUR WAY TO A PUBLISHER!!!!!!!!!! TO PUBLISH THIS MASTERPEICE YOU BESTOWED UP ON ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Well anyways gg, Sorry for the rant hehe
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02/28/2021 1:07 am
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F I N N L E Y
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Love itttttt
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03/01/2021 4:36 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Hehe that's the goal, love! ❀️ Thank you 😊
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02/20/2021 12:35 pm
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Punkamoar
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That's real nice, good job!
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02/20/2021 12:55 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Thank you! Good to see you're still active :)
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02/20/2021 3:14 pm
Level 53 : Grandmaster Musician
Punkamoar
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I'm not really, but I always pop back in for a good blog contest.
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02/12/2021 6:10 pm
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FireGirl
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I LπŸ’œVE this poem!
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02/04/2021 7:08 pm
Level 18 : Journeyman Fish
Yeerbles
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if this doesn't win i will eat my table
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02/04/2021 10:10 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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πŸ˜‚

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02/04/2021 11:36 am
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Kingslayerc
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lol beautiful almost made me shed a tear.
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02/03/2021 3:57 pm
Level 19 : Journeyman Cookie
Medicinei
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My hope of winning just left my heart as I read this.
With this poem I can maybe get 2nd place but I'm pretty sure if many write like you then I will not come in the finals.
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02/03/2021 4:42 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Don't lose hope! I read your poem and I liked it. You still have a chance. This is my first contest anyway, so may I very well not win. Besides, if you are struck with new inspiration, you can always edit your entry. And remember, there are always more contests you can enter in the future.
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02/03/2021 5:04 pm
Level 19 : Journeyman Cookie
Medicinei
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You know here's the thing this is my first contest too lol
Im So nervous. But you honestly made a great job.
This one of the best poems I read y oh deserve to win!!
At least you should be a finalist!
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02/27/2021 1:13 pm
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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See? You're also a finalist. You have a very good chance of beating me c:
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02/27/2021 1:40 pm
Level 19 : Journeyman Cookie
Medicinei
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i do see, but i won't say i'd be better that you. but knows? lol i'm very happy to be very honest
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02/03/2021 11:27 am
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cats say meow
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the contest is pretty much over now because I think you just won
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02/03/2021 11:34 am
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Thank you, I appreciate the enthusiasm! I am beginning to wish I waited until the last day to publish, however, because it looks like I set an expectation for solemn/melancholic poetry. So many of the entries are all dark and gloomy now.
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02/03/2021 9:24 am
Level 16 : Journeyman uwu
Amandality
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this is wonderful, best of luck
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02/02/2021 6:04 pm
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Wannabe FallOutBoy
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dude you deserve 1st place i wrote 4-10 lines unlike you described it like a pog champ :D
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02/02/2021 3:58 pmhistory
Level 58 : Grandmaster Wizard
JayLythical
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I can not not give this a diamond,
and a heart for writing beautiful and clear.
Though the sorrow and pain is obvious,
what a beautiful poem dear!

I hope you win, by far the best entry so far!
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02/02/2021 3:50 pm
Level 8 : Apprentice Pokemon
LadylikeAlloy24
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Your poem is beautiful im rooting for you gg
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02/02/2021 3:43 pm
Level 29 : Expert Procrastinator
Melodicapplez
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Beautiful poem! Good luck :D
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02/02/2021 2:52 pm
Level 30 : Artisan uwu
bianagirl
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such a beautiful poem !!!
it's amazing !!!

you are so good at this !!!
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02/02/2021 2:05 pm
Level 33 : Artisan Birb
LugiaGal-
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Amazing depth and so much meaning! Awesome job!
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02/02/2021 1:46 pm
Level 21 : Expert Blueberry
Mooniium
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This is so...beautiful. :’)
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02/02/2021 2:05 pmhistory
Level 22 : Expert Geek
Cardinal System
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Oh geez, you're making me blush... :3
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02/02/2021 1:45 pm
Level 30 : Artisan Magical Boy
WannabeTommyInnit
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YES PLEASE I LOVE IT PLS WIN AAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
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02/02/2021 1:33 pm
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Starstriker3000
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Your poem is really good! I hope you win!
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02/02/2021 1:06 pmhistory
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ViviLu
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;D good luck!!!
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02/02/2021 12:48 pm
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FieryFighter
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Aw, thank you for sharing. Very pretty, and I personally felt the vulnerability aspect of your poem and everything that goes with that.
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