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This was the second poem that i ever wrote... please tell me if its any good.
My love for her
does not compare
to the sun or the moon
or even the nice icy air.
My feelings are deeper
and way more true
deeper and fuller
than a true full blue moon.
Warm feelings
from way down deep
a fire from a spark
that i wish to keep.
A light breeze in the air
the wind blowing through
her beautiful black hair.
Then and there
i see a twinkle in her eye
as we look into the sky.
She grabs my hand
and i unclench my fist
then we end the night
as we had passionately kissed.
If you read this please comment and tell me if it was good or anything
My love for her
does not compare
to the sun or the moon
or even the nice icy air.
My feelings are deeper
and way more true
deeper and fuller
than a true full blue moon.
Warm feelings
from way down deep
a fire from a spark
that i wish to keep.
A light breeze in the air
the wind blowing through
her beautiful black hair.
Then and there
i see a twinkle in her eye
as we look into the sky.
She grabs my hand
and i unclench my fist
then we end the night
as we had passionately kissed.
If you read this please comment and tell me if it was good or anything
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Update #1 : by kenworld1 09/28/2012 12:59:43 amSep 28th, 2012
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