Well, this map is truely better than the other one.

6/10 Points

It was very simple made (don't say you needed a lots of Redstone, that makes your map not attractive) but still very difficult. Also NEVER say you have watched many tutorials! Redstone needs alot of practice! It's not learned easily, you need time to get it right and of course the commands...As I said, use /tellraw instead of /say. Also say at least in the map, at which version the map should be played. I played it first in 1.8 and nothing worked. I looked at the redstone to get, that I have to play it on 1.7.x

I liked it, but it is really short...

I reccomend one of my blog posts, 'How to make high Quality Advenuremaps'. These will give your maps a better touch. [Click Here]

PS: Practice practice practice.......without skills, your maps are not worth it to play ;)